Do-it-yourself journalism: Rewrite a BusinessWeek story

Think a BusinessWeek story missed an important point? Which paragraph would you put it into, and what would you cut to make the space?
Stephen Baker

Think a BusinessWeek story missed an important point? It happens all the time. But here's an exercise for you: Which paragraph would you put it into, and what would you cut to make the space? Those thoughts occurred to me as I read this comment from a reader:

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